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Lovin’ You (Jazz Song)
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Lyrics:
am·biv·a·lence /amˈbivələns/
n. The state of having mixed feelings or contradictory ideas about something or someone.
“LOVIN’ YOU”
Words and Music by C.W. Brownell
© 2021
VERSE 1:
Lovin’ you ain’t worth the trouble
On the double, I’ll escape out of view
But if I see your smile, I might stay for a while
Till I’m through ... lovin’ you
VERSE 2:
Lovin’ you ain’t worth the sorrow
Come tomorrow, gonna tell you to “shoo”
But if I hear your voice, I won’t have any choice
But to keep on just lovin’ you
BRIDGE:
I will admit that it’s true—
I’m of two minds about you
I shouldn’t love you but
Lovin’ you’s what I do
VERSE 3:
Lovin’ you ain’t worth the worry
In a hurry, [I will / gonna] find someone new
But if I feel your touch, none of that matters much
‘Cause I’m not through with lovin’ you
OUTRO:
Yes, I’m not through with lovin’ ... you
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TO YOU AND ME
Here's a New Year's Eve drinking song about life, death, and the passage of time."To You and Me"© 2017 Words* and Music by C.W. BrownellVERSE 1:As we gather to rememberAll the things that came to passBidding farewell to DecemberWith a song and with a glassLet us sing of all the goals we crossedLet us toast to victoryLet us note how much the friends we lostTruly meant to you and meVERSE 2:They say time is always flying—Gather rosebuds while you mayFor, tomorrow, will be dyingAll that blooms for you todayRaise your voice and join us in the songRaise your hand for all to seeCelebrate before the moment's goneRaise your glass to you and meBRIDGE:As the moments become hoursAnd the hours turn to daysRight before your eyes, the years go byAnd memories fade awayVERSE 3:Years from now when people gatherAnd we're gone without a traceHere are questions that will matterFor the ones who take our placeWill they laud the gods of alcohol?Will they sing our melody?Will they pause to think of us ... at all?Will they drink to you and me?Will they drink to you and me?* The first stanza of Verse 2 is based on the first stanza of “To the Virgins, to Make Much of Time”, a poem by Robert Herrick (1591-1674).
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What's this song about? I can't figure it out.Also, what's a "prietor"?
Dennis, take a look at this article. It has good advice for any songwriter.https://www.musicstartshere.org/songwriter-articles/the-top-5-lyric-pitfallsThe section entitled “Telling Instead of Showing” could help you out with this song. Instead of flat out saying the man cheated on his woman and that she did the same to him, tell a story in which these events play out a bit more subtly.Just a thought.
Arty and Larry:Sorry it took me so long to respond and thank you for your comments.Arty, my intent with the lyrics was not to contextualize them too much. I kind of thought it might work as a movie theme about some famous explorer of the past, or as a song about a modern-day guy who lives down the street. Talking about a “drive” was placing it in time more specifically than I wanted it to be.Larry, I already used “destiny” in the first verse, so using it again in the bridge didn’t seem right to me.Thanks to both of you for the comments and suggestions.P.S.: I changed “no going back” to “no turning back” in the bridge.
Brent Baxter’s analysis of “Lights Come On” was very interesting. If there’s any truth to all the talk about what “Millennials” are like, then the song should hit pay dirt with Jason Aldean’s audience.Baxter's second point, “The listener is the hero”, sure sounds familiar:“Not only does Aldean talk directly to the listener, he’s complimenting them. They’re the hero of the story. The listener is the hardworking guy or the cool girl who deserves a good time. [H]e makes them feel good about themselves, which of course, makes them feel good about the singer.”Yup. Everyone’s a winner. And everybody gets a trophy.I wonder if “Who said life is fair?” will ever come back into vogue.
Regarding the Blake Shelton song, "Came Here to Forget":Music: The music was unusual but overly repetitive and monotonous. I didn't find the melody very interesting or aesthetically pleasing.Music/Lyric Combo: The song struck me as having too many words jammed into it given the relatively slow pace of the music. This made it hard at times to follow what is being said. This rapid-fire style of singing is rather common nowadays, but I don't care for it much.Lyrics: (1) Though ostensibly a "pain song", the lyrics were more angry than sorrowful. I guess it's not "cool" to feel pain in response to a breakup anymore--just wrath and revenge. (2) There was an interesting dichotomy between (a) the drunken, happy amorousness that the man and woman in the bar were feeling towards each other and (b) the brooding hatred (amplified by the music) that each felt towards their ex's. (3) Some cliché phrases (e.g., "misery loves company" and "thick as thieves") were unnecessarily thrown in.I don't know exactly why this song "worked". I guess it's doing something that the younger crowd likes.
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Lost
Here's a little romantic ballad (I'm thinking contemporary country) about how love can turn your whole world upside-down."Lost"© 2016 C.W. BrownellVERSE 1:I used to think I knew my way around—Was master of my destinyI knew just where I've been and where I'm boundBut, lately, when you look at me....CHORUS:I get lost ... in your eyesWander off ... to paradiseJust one gaze ... I'm in a dazeIn your arms ... I'm ... lostVERSE 2:It's like a whole new world when I'm with youYou are my great discoveryNow going home is something I can't do'Cause, honey, when you're holding me....(CHORUS)BRIDGE:I can't find it on a map—This place called "You and Me"Though I'm sure there's no turning backThere's no place else I'd rather be(CHORUS)OUTRO:Just one gaze ... I'm in a dazeIn your arms ... I'm ... lost
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