Angelo Mulla

Thanks all. I have gone back and forth on this one. It never has gotten to a place where I would consider it done. The most recent attempt to record it took the lyrics back to the beginning. We'll have to see where it ends up. For the time being, I am on to other pieces. Angelo

Dennis. Wow! Very heartfelt and moving. If this is about a real woman, you are blessed to have them in your life. If not, you've shown great ability to connect with a character. Some things...Washed our clothes in a moping palShould be 'mopping pail'If it wasn’t for your prayers mama I wouldn’t be where I’m are... This isn't proper grammar... Nice song!Angelo 

Wes and Arty, thanks for the input and encouragement. I will digest these and get back to more of the rewrite. Angelo

Thanks Arty. I dropped the last verse entirely on Donna's suggestion. I am probably going to rewrite the first half of the second verse so as to make things flow better. Any thoughts on the bridge other than lose it?Angelo

Great song Larry. A lot of fun!

Further Rewrite....Here is what I have so far.... While I can say I am not happy with it and don't consider it finished, I also feel like I am more in touch with what I want to say as a whole. I would like to say it more poetically. As for the bridge, this can be expanded but what I was going for was a play on the words that start with re and to communicate that the first person has a  'backbone'  as Donna mentioned. I am considering adding an additional four lines of similar structure to the bridge to create a greater build up to the "end" of his stand. Thoughts please.CAUTION TO THE WINDI wanna hear it from your lipsIs there another guy?Too bad my questions trip you up,‘Cuz you’re stumbling on your alibi’s.That girl’s weekend out to VegasThey all said you had to takeI asked one of them about it,she said that Florida was greatChorus:Caution to the windYou threw… Caution to the windIts true,I know where you’ve been,Throwing caution to the wind.All your carefully crafted stories,Woven lies you’ve spun so wellCould not insulate me from the truth,the look upon your face now tells.Did you think I wouldn’t find outor that somehow you’d escapeall the dreadful consequence’sof the choice that you have madeChorus:Bridge:Regrets.Sad state. (Or --- too great)Remorse.Too late.Reasons.Don’t careThe end,I’m there!Chorus

Thanks Donna. Very helpful! I go back again!!!  :)

I addressed some of the issues that were brougth up in critics and am posting for further feedback... thanks in advanceCaution to the WindI wanna hear it from your lipsIs there another guy?I’m sorry if my questions trip you up,but you’re stumbling on your alibi’sThat girl’s weekend out to VegasThey all said you had to takeI asked one of them about it,she said that Florida was greatChorus:Caution to the windYou threw… Caution to the windIts true,I know where you’ve been,Throwing caution to the wind.All your carefully crafted stories,Woven lies you’ve spun so wellCould not insulate me from the truth,the look upon your face now tells.Would you answer a few questions?How long has this been going on?Is he someone that you care for?Was it a fling and now he’s gone?ChorusBridge:Just like an embers flicker can burst into a flameOften a pleasure’s simmer will turn out much the sameBut when the fire’s put out and all that’s left is a messThose who’re stuck with the ruin must clear up what’s leftI wanna hear it from your lipsBut right now all I feel is painAnd though I’ve done my best to keep it in,I only wish you felt the sameDon’t want to hear of your excuses,apologies or reasons whyNo need to make a single sound‘cause the next your hear will be goodbye (sound of slamming door)