Wes,
Liked the song a lot, I could defintley hear it playing in my head to a country tune. Easy to read and the structure I'm sure would make it very easy to listen to. If this is on open mic I'll for sure be giving it a couple listens!
The only problem I had was the second half of the second verse (the last 4 lines). It just didn't seem very cohesive or smooth. I'm sure it would work on its own, but the way the rest of the verses are laid out, it seemed like a little bit of a mouthful, and it kind of strayed from the rhyme scheme. But that might just be me, and hopefully that makes sense.
Liked the song a lot, I could defintley hear it playing in my head to a country tune. Easy to read and the structure I'm sure would make it very easy to listen to. If this is on open mic I'll for sure be giving it a couple listens!
The only problem I had was the second half of the second verse (the last 4 lines). It just didn't seem very cohesive or smooth. I'm sure it would work on its own, but the way the rest of the verses are laid out, it seemed like a little bit of a mouthful, and it kind of strayed from the rhyme scheme. But that might just be me, and hopefully that makes sense.
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