Thanks arty for the critique I really do appriciate it after that's what this forum s all about. The choice of words in the lyric illustrates how my family is handling the fact that I am gone. First deployment that we as a family has had to face and she my wife has never dealt with being alone with two kids so that's the reason for the verbiage. And yeah the four line verses are a little abstract but I'm finding it hard to add to them. And lastly the chorus has a lot of na na na s after the last line of it to the rhythm of the ballad with a "my desert lullaby " repeated every so often.
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