Dennis,
I like this. Has lots of emotional appeal and I'm sure people can relate.
I'm not a musician but I would consider working on the meter to keep it balanced and basically the same between the verses.
And in the chorus I really don't think you need lines 6- 8. Take a look below. The message and heart of what the singer or point of view is trying to get across comes through just fine without those lines. Singer doesn't have to prove himself in my humble opinion. : ) TV line detracts from the message which is a great one in a good story. : )
A few minor grammatical errors and the title..... I think you meant...... Mama's Prayers. Rise Above it All might work also.
Chorus:
Make your haters your motivator
That’s what mama use to say
You don’t need people like them in your life anyway
Baby keep your head up and keep moving on
Someday you are going to rise above it all
Carl
I like this. Has lots of emotional appeal and I'm sure people can relate.
I'm not a musician but I would consider working on the meter to keep it balanced and basically the same between the verses.
And in the chorus I really don't think you need lines 6- 8. Take a look below. The message and heart of what the singer or point of view is trying to get across comes through just fine without those lines. Singer doesn't have to prove himself in my humble opinion. : ) TV line detracts from the message which is a great one in a good story. : )
A few minor grammatical errors and the title..... I think you meant...... Mama's Prayers. Rise Above it All might work also.
Chorus:
Make your haters your motivator
That’s what mama use to say
You don’t need people like them in your life anyway
Baby keep your head up and keep moving on
Someday you are going to rise above it all
Carl
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