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Dan Lamons
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OD OldDog said...

Alright Brother,  I don't care for the message behind this song; but I'll offer some changes to keep your original hook.

I want no credit or mention, should you decide to use any of this.  Keep it to yourself like a family secret they don't want to share.  Ha!!!

We loved life, everything was fine 
Never thought; about being two timed 
First our marriage then our car broke down 
A young tow truck driver came to our house 

He did more than just load up our car 
He took a pick up line way too far 
I didn't mind the auto repair bill 
But not what the pregancy tests revieled 

Chorus: 
Tell me baby, and don't be lyin' 
I'm talkin' 'bout the baby, you are hidin' 
I'm the daddy who's paying your rent 
Don't try to act so innocent 
I'm asking you for the last time 
Is it his or is it mine 

Lord please forgive me for even attempting to be a part of this.

OD





Thanks for the input OD but the lyrics posted below this response is probably how it will all go down.

Just know. Even though not in print,you are here in spirit, a major influence hidden within the crafting of this opulent piece. For that I thank you. 

I will get a cut of this over the weekend.  Be sure to have your best sox on and your shoes laced up tight


   IS SHE HIS OR IS SHE MINE                           EDIT 6/26

Livin the life, everything was fine                            edit 6/26
Had no worries thought you were mine
Then came the day your car broke down                edit 6/26
A the tow truck driver came to the house               edit 6/25

Behind my back you'se seeing him
He's takin yo love I'm payin the rent
Was my first taste of playin the fool
You making me crazy this ain't cool

Chorus
Tell me baby don't be lyin
Is SHE his or is SHE mine                               EDIT 6/26
Tell me baby please don't lie                             edit 6/26
Is SHE his or is SHE mine                               EDIT 6/26
Tell me baby why oh why                                 edit 6/26
All I do is cry cry cry                                       edit  6/26


Instrumental Break

This is where it all unwinds
You sure broke the tie that binds                         edit 6/25
You and me baby sure were tight                        edit 6/25
Now all we got is fuss and a fight                        edit 6/25

Chorus

Tell me baby don't be lyin
Is SHE his or is SHE mine                                   EDIT 6/26
Tell me baby please don't lie                                 edit 6/26
Is SHE his or is SHE mine                                   EDIT 6/26
Tell me baby why oh why                                     edit 6/26
All I do is cry cry cry                                           edit   6/26

Outro