Hi Billie Kay and fellow thread weavers:
In the Dark... is a super title. I don't usually chime-in on lyrics but I believe you have the beginnings of a super song here. Whatever you do, don't be in a hurry. I don't know if you sing or write melodies but always keep that aspect in mind if you don't. Eventually, someone has to sing the song and "singability" is an important factor.
In the third line of the first verse... would "someone's on your mind" work? I know there are other elements to be "whittled-on" but it is a fantastic start.
Larry and someone else suggested you move this to the collaborators corner. That is up to you but they probably have more knowledge about how the site works than me.
Best of luck with this, ----Dave
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