All good points, Carl. But I wanted to leave that part of the slate clean so that folks could chalk in their own story. In a tv/film background scenario, lyrical details shouldn't conflict in any way with the actual storyline. (Of course, this film/tv scenario is all in my mind! LOL )
I know what you mean, Ott. I normally always take a lyric in a slightly different direction in the bridge, to give the story momentum (and 'hope', where required). In this case, though, I thought it might work by keeping the tone the same throughout.
While writing the bridge, however, I did feel it pulled too much downwards.
I'll have a shot at twisting the direction a little.
I'll have a shot at twisting the direction a little.
Thank you both for your feedback. :)
Donna
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