Tracks To Nowhere

Who can not like an advice song, and you have put some great lines in here, really liked the

The price you pay for living that way
Is measured in all that you've lost


Improvements well they are varied but for mine the story doesnt progress enough.

Each Verse and the Chorus are basically saying the same thing

Maybe trying to change the sections to be seperate with no bleeding for one to the other
V1 - what I Did - my life
Chorus - dont follow my tracks
V2 - what the son is doing now
Chorus - dont follow my tracks
Bridge - you one day may father my grandchild
dont want you having to say to him
Chorus - dont follow my tracks


Arty