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Hello, everyone! once again it is me, Sanny, back again to get some opinions on my lyrics. I wrote a happy song for once in my life so take a gander at this please and thank you.


If white people are responsible for modern disney sitcoms,
then clearly i'm at fault for putting us where we are today. 

the water's reached the ceiling and you and I are both drowning in feelings.
oh my 
oh my 
oh my what a mess we've made. 

(Instrumental fill goes here)

if the question stays rhetorical, but the answer's common sense, 
do we still open up our mouth's to say, "why yes I feel (the exact same way/exactly the same.)"? 
oh dear 
oh dear 
oh dear what have we done?
(x2) 

Chorus: 
So please tell me about all these places you say you'd rather be 
& she said anywhere, yeah anywhere, that's not right next to me. 
Oh darling don't kid yourself I see through your flustered lies 
But i've never been more worried when she said she can also see through mine.

Bridge:
this cold war tensions wearing thin 
because you never wear your secrets on your skin 
Even with my lips having been just there 
You still won't budge and say you care 
Oh but I know you do
Oh but I know you do, my dear
You won't say it out loud 
But i'm what you fear

(and then just insert another chorus and that's pretty much it.)

So yeah. A little bit different from what I usually write. A smidgen happier. Not a sad song for once. Tell me what you guys think! What did I do right? What did I do wrong? What can I fix? Is it any improvement from my usual stuff? 
Also expect more things to come from me. It's summer now, so I can focus again on working on my songs.