GROUP COLLABORATION

I had an idea for a fun group challenge - a group collaboration.  The idea is that each person add two lines to the lines that already exist.  There is no title yet, intentionally - hopefully, as the lyrics would progress, a title (or hook) would come to someone.  There is no storyline yet as well, also intentionally.  I thought we could all have some fun brainstorming on this one, to see what we come up with. If someone has a great idea for a chorus, go ahead and supply the two lines, but make sure that you let everyone else know that those two lines are the beginning of the chorus.

If you come up with two lines to add to the existing lyrics, copy and paste the existing lyrics into a new reply, and add your two lines.  You can add more than 2 lines to the overall effort, but after adding your two lines, allow someone else to contribute the next couple lines. 

Maybe this will work, maybe it won't.  Maybe I've taken leave of my senses (wouldn't be the first time - LOL!)  Sometimes it's hard enough with just two people collaborating, LOL. This is the first time that something like this has ever been attempted on SongRamp in its 14 year history (that I'm aware of) so let's see what we can do and see what happens. Although it's a challenge, we may surprise ourselves, and make this a SongRamp first!  

I'll start it off with two lines that kind of popped into my head. 

With the holidays right around the corner, maybe we could make this a holiday themed song?  Just an idea. 

It was a cold night in Nashville
As she stepped out of the cab 

It was a cold night in Nashville

As she stepped out of the cab

Free spirit, hiding from life

An angel in olive drab.

Love this idea Dale, and great pick up Larry. Okay I'll add my 2c hehehe.

It was a cold night in Nashville

As she stepped out of the cab

Free spirit, hiding from life

An angel in olive drab.

Sat on a bench in Bradley Park

Waiting for sunrise in the dark

It was a cold night in Nashville

As she stepped out of the cab

Free spirit, hiding from life

An angel in olive drab.

Sat on a bench in Bradley Park

Waiting for sunrise in the dark

Knowing the odds weren't good today

Still, hoping that things were gonna change

It was a cold night in Nashville
As she stepped out of the cab
Free spirit, hiding from life
An angel in olive drab.

Sat on a bench in Bradley Park
Waiting for sunrise in the dark
Knowing the odds weren't good today
Still, hoping that things were gonna change

"You've given good service" She'd heard them say
But what  good was that  when she  looked at yesterday

Suddenly her thoughts began to race

As a line of sweat ran down her face

It was a cold night in Nashville
As she stepped out of the cab
Free spirit, hiding from life
An angel in olive drab.

Sat on a bench in Bradley Park
Waiting for sunrise in the dark
Knowing the odds weren't good today
Still, hoping that things were gonna change

"You've given good service" She'd heard them say
But what  good was that  when she  looked at yesterday

Suddenly her thoughts began to race

As a line of sweat ran down her face

She'd never faced the world alone

And now she was so far from home

Chorus?

She was a Nashville honey

no room no car no money

Ok I got four more lines before I could stop then I remembered the rules :D

(I think one person should write the chorus, seeing as it's usually a "train of thought") ((just a suggestion))

I agree with Skipp.  The chorus might then be stronger as it's one writer's stream of thoughts.

Dale you started us off. What do you think?   : )

I'm good either way. 

Ahh but someone else may come up with a direction I didn't think of.  That's the beauty of these things.  :)

Having the Chorus done by just one person works for me.  Go for it!  

Ok here's the rest of it.  Keep it or sweep it.

she came to town to make the rounds

belting out that Country sound

thinking stardom could be found

but all that getting knocked around

put her feet back on the ground

Or this could replace some lines and be more repetative 

She was a Nashville honey

no room no car no money

Or someone could come up with something entirely different :)

It was a cold night in Nashville
As she stepped out of the cab
Free spirit, hiding from life
An angel in olive drab.

 Sat on a bench in Bradley Park

Waiting for sunrise in the dark
Knowing the odds weren't good today
Still, hoping that things were gonna change

 "You've given good service" She'd heard them say
But what  good was that  when she  looked at yesterday

Suddenly her thoughts began to race
As a line of sweat ran down her face

She'd never faced the world alone

And now she was so far from home
So she picked up her backpack

Heading east across the tracks

She came to town to make the rounds

Belting out that Country sound

Thinking stardom could be found

But all that getting knocked around

Bags in one hand, guitar in the other

Approached by a man who said he was her brother

It was a cold night in Nashville
As she stepped out of the cab
Free spirit, hiding from life
An angel in olive drab.

Sat on a bench in Bradley Park

Waiting for sunrise in the dark

Knowing the odds weren't good today
Still, hoping that things were gonna change

 "You've given good service" She'd heard them say

But what  good was that  when she  looked at yesterday

Suddenly her thoughts began to race

As a line of sweat ran down her face

She'd never faced the world alone

And now she was so far from home

So she picked up her backpack

Heading east across the tracks

She came to town to make the rounds

Belting out that Country sound

Thinking stardom could be found

But all that getting knocked around

Bags in one hand, guitar in the other

Approached by a man who said he was her brother

He said "You may not know it but our lives are entwined"

Then he offered her a swig of his wine

She was skeptical at first

But she really had a thirst

Looks like it didn't paste right and my fix didn't take.

It should have read:

she came to town to make the rounds

belting out that Country sound

thinking stardom could be found

but all that getting knocked around

put her feet back on the ground

SO...altogether it's (too long?)

She was a Nashville honey

no room no car no money

she came to town to make the rounds

belting out that Country sound

thinking stardom could be found

but all that getting knocked around

put her feet back on the ground

Sorry for any confusion caused by my inherent ineptitude.

You think you're inept Tracy?  Spend a day with me on this thing! LOL!

Oh, no worries. Come to think of it,  I haven't even been paying attention to meter. This is one big experiment. Love it.  

We can go back and make adjustments if the consensus comes to that.

Let me see if I can surgically place Tracy's intended chorus into the stomach of our developing lyric child below.

Is anyone else having trouble with single spacing vs double spacing between lines besides me?   For some reason my  font size doesn't have anything to do with single vs double spacing.   Watch I bet ya' it's somethin' real simple.

Anyway   I hope this looks OK.   Woo!  I hope I haven't confused anybody.  Lol

V1

It was a cold night in Nashville
As she stepped out of the cab
Free spirit, hiding from life
An angel in olive drab.

V2

 Sat on a bench in Bradley Park

Waiting for sunrise in the dark

Knowing the odds weren't good today
Still, hoping that things were gonna change

V3
"You've given good service" She'd heard them say

But what  good was that  when she  looked at yesterday
Suddenly her thoughts began to race

As a line of sweat ran down her face

 V4

She'd never faced the world alone

And now she was so far from home
So she picked up her backpack

Heading east across the tracks

(Chorus)
She was a Nashville honey

Bags in one hand, guitar in the other

Approached by a man who said he was her brother
He said "You may not know it but our lives are entwined"

Then he offered her a swig of his wine

V6

 She was skeptical at first

But really had a thirst

She got a weird double space

from her copy and paste 

so she made a face

and it looked like this  

  > <

  /---\

But I digress