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This is mostly just a rearrangement of the lines already posted. I tried to use them all but there were a few lines I just couldn't make work out for this. The meter is based on a straight 8 rhythm @90 bpm. Haven't got the chorus figured yet but I think it works out.
Use it or lose it, no matter to me. It was fun to do 
V1
It was a cold night in Nashville, as she stepped out of the cab
Free spirit, hiding from life
Huddled on a park bench, holding all she had
Fallen angel waiting for sunrise
Odds aren’t good today that things are gonna change
In spite of the things she’s heard them say
ch
She came to town to make the rounds
Belting out that Country sound
Thought that stardom could be found
But all that getting knocked around
Has left her feeling like a clown
Turned her smile into a frown
Put her feet back on the ground
V2
Was a time she had it good, she was a Nashville honey
Now here she is lost in Bradley Park
Finds herself in olive drab, no room no car no money
Waiting in the dark
Odds aren’t good today that things are gonna change
In spite of the things she’s heard them say
ch
She came to town to make the rounds
Belting out that Country sound
Thought that stardom could be found
But all that getting knocked around
Has left her feeling like a clown
Turned her smile into a frown
Put her feet back on the ground
bridge
She’d never faced the world alone
And now she is so far from home
ch
This is fabulous. Now the million $ Question???? What's the name of this song?
Smorgasboard
put in an Instrumental bridge without lyrics 
"A Cold Night in Nashville"?
"Cold Nashville"?
"The Cold Life Of Nashville"?
"put in an Instrumental bridge without lyrics "
Yup!
"Angel in Nashville"? In my humble opinion this title would peek a lot interest!!
So I played with this one a little. This mp3 track, warts and all, is only verse one and a chorus and you might have to read along because my vocal is less than good. I was feeling it out while recording. And just for fun I added a whole bunch of "I wonder what this sounds like". LOL I learned the second verse doesn't sing well the way I had hoped so that's not here. Also, if there is a chorus repeat, and an instrumental break, this ends up close to the 3+ minute mark. Do you think a bridge is still needed or should the bridge be the inst. break?
http://www.mediafire.com/view/k58iuipuk5j675f/Angel%20In%20Nashville%20part1test.mp3
V1
It was a cold night in Nashville, as she stepped out of the cab
Free spirit, hiding from life
Huddled on a park bench, holding all she had
An angel waiting for sunrise
Odds aren’t good today that things are gonna change
In spite of the things she’s heard them say
ch
She came to town to make the rounds
Belting out that Country sound
Thought that stardom could be found
But all that getting knocked around
Has left her feeling like a clown
Turned her smile into a frown
Put her feet back on the ground
I think this is a great effort!
Try it both ways and we can all then chime in. But, I'm leaning towards an instrumental bridge. Experiment with it.
Again, I think it sounds great as a first beginning!
I like the vibe! Nice job.
OK, its a little sloppy, but I think you'll get the gist of what I was going for here. This is just chorus, bridge, chorus. I'm leaning toward another chorus repeat and fade out. IDK. I think it lends itself to the context of the lyrics somewhat.
http://mfi.re/listen/rvlbt3uhsvc7t66/Angel_In_Nashville_bridgetest.mp3
Tomorrow I'll try something different. See how that goes....
Cool!!
Yes, I like that.
Are you saying (from your previous post) that verse two needs a rewrite to make it fit?
Tracy Hutchison said...
Yes, I like that.
Are you saying (from your previous post) that verse two needs a rewrite to make it fit?
Yes, although I've already made some adjustments. Sorry, I should have posted them before this.
A few subtle changes in v1 and then, looking for the positive spin on this, v2 helps to change the meaning of the chorus without writing a new chorus.
V1
It was a cold night in Nashville, as she stepped out of the cab
Free spirit, hiding from life
Huddled on a park bench, holding all she had
Fallen angel waiting for sunrise
Odds aren’t good that things are gonna change
Because of what she’s heard them say
ch
She came to town to make the rounds
Belting out that Country sound
Thought that stardom could be found
But all that getting knocked around
Has left her feeling like a clown
Turned her smile into a frown
Put her feet back on the ground
V2
Was a time she had it good, she was Nashville’s girl
Someone told her she’ll go far
Finds herself in olive drab, alone in this world
Angel waiting in the dark
(But)Her mind is made up that things are gonna change
In spite of what she’s heard them say
ch
She came to town to make the rounds
Belting out that Country sound
Thought that stardom could be found
But all that getting knocked around
Has left her feeling like a clown
Turned her smile into a frown
Put her feet back on the ground
http://mfi.re/listen/b4c5p6b5rzmh61b/Angel_In_Nashville_cpmixv1.mp3
Here is V1, chorus, bridge, chorus,chorus. I cut out the V2 section(simple cut and paste) until the lyrics are finalized. Set up with the extra chorus, the song plays out to 3:04 min.
I added a dulcimer to the bridge and a few other places and therefore this mix for your listening pleasure. Steel drums might have worked instead.
Your thoughts?
V2
Finally she got them good, she was Nashville’s star
Despite it all she’d gone far
Finds herself in a spot light, in front of the world
No more huddles in the park
She made her mind up things would change
In spite of what she’s heard them say
Something like that???
PS Needs a fiddle...maybe?
Sounds good Gerald. I like the beat also. How about a harmonica. Out of place?
Like the lyrics, Carl. You've opened the option of a vocal bridge or even a combination of both.
I'll give both a fiddle and harmonica a spin. I think maybe a fiddle in the chorus but the harmonica reserved for the verse? We'll see....
Yeah, I wasn't sure about the harmonica either but for some reason just crossed my thought waves. Lol