Robert
think this is better but it reads to ( the only way i can describe it ) clinical . there is no emotion it is as if you are just stating a fact ,
this is only how i see it others will have there own view , probably easyier to write as an outsider
a photo album on the table down in the den
full of happy memories from before when
now they are reminders of what had been
before this nightmare shattered our dream
think if you could get this sort of mood it will work a whole lot better - the chorus is ok i think
john
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