Thank you Peggy, I just saw my mess up in verse 1, and I didnt like Title in the bridge so changed that also..........I hate when I miss the simple stuff.
John thank you for the feed back, I dont know if it was done tentionally or not but I dont see what dream rhymes with.....maybe you were just trying to kick start Ideas in me head:)
Suzanne, The flow was fine for the musical picture in my head, or what I was humming, but most times when I send in for music it comes back nothing like I pictured............That is a thought, for now I just put it at spanning over generations. thank you for the great feedback also........
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