Caution to the Wind

Thanks for the feedback Arty. Yes, it is country and that is why I felt uncomfortable using stave. The alt I have at this point reads...

Sometimes an embers flicker turns into a flame
and often a pleasure’s simmer ends up just the same
But from the look in your eyes and the sorry they miss
I am certain your heart must know about this.

Thanks for the suggestion to look at different degrees of rhymes. Very helpful.