Wes -
Yep .. I know ... I listened last night and that was what I was referring to ... when I listened I felt like there wasn't quite enough differene melodically between the verses and the chorus BUT I do feel with a bit of tweaking it would probably work just fine the way you mostly sang it. It is definitely a song lyric ... flows nicely ... good rhyming pattern ... and song structure. Thje subject matter certainly isn't anything new but what is? I personally like it and think you did a fine job.
Kip
Yep .. I know ... I listened last night and that was what I was referring to ... when I listened I felt like there wasn't quite enough differene melodically between the verses and the chorus BUT I do feel with a bit of tweaking it would probably work just fine the way you mostly sang it. It is definitely a song lyric ... flows nicely ... good rhyming pattern ... and song structure. Thje subject matter certainly isn't anything new but what is? I personally like it and think you did a fine job.
Kip
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