A woman's job is never done

Dennis Wright

Song title/ ‘’ A Woman’s Job is never done.’’

©2015

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VS 1:

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Boy I cook your dinner I wash your clothes

Do all the things a good woman do for her man

I massage your back when you come home from work

And I never complain about anything

VS 2

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I take your kids to school and pick them up every afternoon

Make sure all the bills are paid when they are due

I do everything that need to be done in this house

But you always seem to find something to cuss me out about

Chorus:

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Only and ungrateful man will treat his lady this way

You’re not the only one who works 24 hours a day

I wish that you could walk a mile are two in my shoes

Then you will see that it ain’t easy a woman’s job is never done

VS 3:

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When I make love to you, you say things to make me cry

And in the back of my head I can’t help but to wonder why

But I deserve respect and to be treated like a queen

I do everything I can for you but nothing seems to be working

Chorus:

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Bridge Chorus:

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Starting here today an apology would be great

I ain’t taking anymore of your dirt

Boy you know I love you I will do anything for you

But if you don’t get your act together I’m leaving you

Chorus:

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It takes a good heart woman to put up with a man like you

The only reason why I’m still here I wanna make it work

I’ll walk through fire for you baby take a bullet to the skull

All I want from you is to show me some love

Boy I cook your dinner, I wash your clothes   

Do all the things a good woman do for her man  Not once have you ever bought me a rose

I massage your back when you come home from work   I massage you when you're  home from work

And I never complain about anything Take your crap when you act like a jerk

VS 2

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I take your kids to school and pick them up every afternoon  I drive THE kids to school five days a week

Make sure all the bills are paid when they are due   Take care of the bills so you don't shriek  

I do everything that need to be done in this house   I do everything I need to do

But you always seem to find something to cuss me out about  But, damn I just wish I could reach you

Chorus:   You need a hook to cement your chorus.   Three or four words that will make people want to repeat and sing it.

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Only and ungrateful man will treat his lady this way

You’re not the only one who works 24 hours a day    8 hours a day as he works probably 8 hours when she's at home as a homemaker

I wish that you could walk a mile are two in my shoes

Then you will see that it ain’t easy a woman’s job is never done

VS 3:

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When I make love to you, you say things to make me cry   Sometimes when we make love I want to cry

And in the back of my head I can’t help but to wonder why  Cuz I wish you were another guy

But I deserve respect and to be treated like a queen I deserve respect just like a queen

I do everything I can for you but nothing seems to be working You won't get things from me if you're mean

Chorus:

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Bridge Chorus:

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Starting here today an apology would be great   

I ain’t taking anymore of your dirt ---

Boy you know I love you I will do anything for you  

But if you don’t get your act together I’m leaving you

Chorus:

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It takes a good heart woman to put up with a man like you

The only reason why I’m still here I wanna make it work

I’ll walk through fire for you baby take a bullet to the skull

All I want from you is to show me some love

Hi, Dennis

I sense the anger in the point of view in your lyric and that's a good thing to show the mood you've illustrated here, but I gave examples above to show how tightening your meter and using a stronger rhyme scheme can deliver more power to  the message.  It's not my intent to change what you've written, but to help spark ideas for you if you decide to edit or revise what you've written.

The message is the same through out the lyric with no real motion or movement in the way of the theme. That's ok but I would consider creating a new bridge that gives or puts a new dimension on things or at least adds to the one you've got.  Maybe it could be her dream of a candle lit dinner, where her husband is a reformed Prince Charming to  be. Lol

I would also keep the chorus as one chorus and work at this because there really is no hook inthe first one. You might be able to write a new one with " All it takes" as perhaps the new title, taken from the 1st line of the final chorus, but that's up to you.

One last thing,   you MIGHT want to suggest in the bridge that she used to work a 9 to 5 job and she chose to live her life as a homemaker, giving up the business world and she is going to get her six figure job back and leave this guy if things don't change. Remember we all make choices and many women today are not stay at home mothers and because of financial reasons both partners have to work. 
A woman's job is never done.  Hmmm ...........   What is a woman's job?    That might not go over so well with the opposite sex, but I could be wrong.   I think the character in your lyric clearly is a homemaker and HER job is never over or done, so to speak, but the role she is performing perhaps should not be generalized as "A woman"  with roles changing.



Anyway, enough of my thoughts. There's plenty for you to think about with what I've said.

You're off to a good start regardless of how you decide to proceed. I do like it!

Use or lose my comments and suggestions.  Just trying to help. 

Carl     : )

Dennis,
My reply to a Womans work is never done, is well why dont she finish it, now.

Carl has written a whole lot of good stuff and some great suggestions so while I wont go over these again, I will say if this is the story you want to write my suggestion re story board and the short two line Bridge which brings it all together

V1   The things I do for you
Chorus  - womans work is never done
V2  I want it like it was (when you used to help)
Chorus - womans work is never done

Bridge
I tell you one thing if things dont improve
The last job I'm gonna do is pack my bags and leave

Chorus - womans work is never done


More so, see if you can do VCVCBC as this will fly and get to the punch of the Bridge

Arty

I sensed a little cajun in that first verse with the "woman do" aspect. The rest of it read out well and showed some fine writing skills. Although it's not necessary, it does help if you change things up with a bridge that summarizes what you've written so far. Otherwise, you're just saying the same old things in three verses by telling us how she's tired of the things the man does or doesn't do which anger her. In my opinion, walk through that line of thinking in two verses and then in the bridge tell the listener what she's going to do about it. It would tell it like a story and reach a climax. Just my thoughts....keep or sweep. Best of luck with it!

Enjoyed Da Read Dennis I think the last line