Awesome piece, the imagery and flow made it so easy to read. And I'm thinking that It'd sound better -in my opinion- with the lift pre-chorus, that way the chorus would have a grander, more contrasting sound to the verses.
The only thing that stuck out to me that could be fixed, was in the second stanza, last line: "And I'm outta cash" would maybe fit better as "And I'm all outta cash".
The only thing that stuck out to me that could be fixed, was in the second stanza, last line: "And I'm outta cash" would maybe fit better as "And I'm all outta cash".
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