Man do I like this, and I sure can relate. Very good write! Tghe things I thought about addressing Kristi has already put forth
She said;
"Line 7 of v1: “So he put me back on hold”.That reads to me as a result of what happened before, but with a little tweak of subbing in “And” in place of “So” and in the next line, “Then” (or some other conjunction) in place of “Till” might add to the list of complaints and some exasperation starts to grow."
She said;
"Line 7 of v1: “So he put me back on hold”.That reads to me as a result of what happened before, but with a little tweak of subbing in “And” in place of “So” and in the next line, “Then” (or some other conjunction) in place of “Till” might add to the list of complaints and some exasperation starts to grow."
Chorus: last line. You could turn it into a warning to us: “Be prepared to shout” or something like that? It’s speaking from one person’s opinion and he’s getting frustrated. You could also say, “But when I call 1-800” (instead of “you" )... “It makes me wanna shout...”
I couldn't have articulated it better...really, I couldn't. :)
Regardless, that's all the input I have. This is good stuff and most people will relate. Very nice job
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